ext_7533 ([identity profile] ali-wildgoose.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] the_water_clock 2006-07-09 11:05 pm (UTC)

First, couple of small typos you may or may not want to bother fixing:

"which was find as Seamus"
"despite his neck being bend"

That said...I really liked this! I love how you don't give into the obvious potential for shippiness, and opted instead for a lighter touch -- nothing overt in terms of their lusting after each other, but enough hinting to leave we readers smirking. ;}

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